Call it a reminder, a warning, or inspiration: Every first draft needs editing. Here’s what happens to my first drafts when I print them out.
In the pages shown above, I changed the setting, the menu, the dialogue, and the characters’ attitudes. I also cut the scene by almost a third. The characters were enjoying their dinner far too much, and blabbing pointlessly. The scene is now much more tightly focused. It still ends in disaster, but gets to the action much quicker.
And yes, I have put up a small, slightly blurry image of the edited pages, because I want to tantalize you and I don’t want to give away anything yet.
But I will tell you that the title of the novel is Phantom Instinct.